Thursday, February 7, 2019

Week 4 Story: When Luck Runs Out

     I start this story by telling you that I’ve been lucky. I survived to manhood in Ancient Greece, which is no small feat. I was one of the warriors who was picked by Odysseus to travel to Troy. I managed to survive a war that lasted for ten long years. Finally, I’m headed home to Ithaca. I’ll see my son and wife again; I’m sure my son is a man in his own now. When you consider everything I’ve been through, I’d say I’m favored by the Fates.
     Odysseus is a little odd, but he is a great leader. After all, he managed to keep us alive for this long. Those of us on his ship anyway. The others were destroyed a while back. It’s a little hard to keep track of the days and weeks, or even months, on the ocean. One day bleeds into the next. Although some of them stand out. Like the monster we encountered, with just the one eye. That was terrifying, especially when he ate a couple of the men. But I’m lucky that I survived that too, I guess. 
     We’re finally back on the ocean again. I don’t know exactly why Odysseus made us go to the land of the dead, but after one last talk with Circe we’re headed home again. Odysseus tends to get distracted, but I know he’s as homesick as the rest of us. Circe gave him some advice apparently. There are these things called Sirens up ahead; Odysseus said they sing songs so beautiful you try to reach them on their little island and end up dying, either because you drown or because they eat you. It’s death to hear them. But, him being him, he wants to listen to their song, probably out of curiosity and for the bragging right. So all of us now have wax in our ears so we can’t hear anything. A couple other guys tied Odysseus to the mast. I can see him from my position at the oar if I turn my head the right way. A few minutes ago he was just standing there, but now he’s struggling, pretty badly too. I’d think he’d hurt himself if I didn’t know how tightly bound he is. I suppose that means we’re within hearing distance of the sirens’ rocks.
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     It took a while, but Odysseus isn’t struggling anymore. He had told us that would mean we were out of hearing of the sirens’ song. It does feel nice to take the wax out of my ears. You don’t realize how much you rely on your hearing for balance, especially on the ocean, until it’s gone.
     I know there are more dangers ahead. I wish Odysseus would tell us exactly, but he’s been a little vague. At some point there’s a monstrous whirlpool by some cliffs. Or a monster that is a whirlpool, I’m not sure which. After he was removed from the mast he gave a speech, told us not to worry and to trust him, basically. All of us do, especially since he's led us this far. Now that we're approaching the whirlpool, he's gotten more specific. Apparently we’ve got to stick as close to the cliffs as we can without actually hitting them. It’s the only way to avoid getting sucked into the whirlpool.
     That whirlpool is terrifying, now that we’re close. I can feel the blood drain from my face, and saw it reflected in my companion’s face. I catch a glimpse of Odysseus, and had enough time to think, “Why he did he change into his armor, is he expecting an attack?” when it happens.
     Something tight and sharp grabs me painfully by the shoulder, and suddenly I’m yanked into the air. My screams mingle with those of others, and I manage to see that a horrible, horrible monster has grabbed me with only one of its heads. There are others also caught by the other heads, and we’re all screaming desperately as the monster drags us into the cave. I catch a last glimpse, impossibly, of Odysseus, standing there in full armor and looking after us as we die.
      I guess my luck finally ran out.

(Source: The Book Palace)

Author’s note: This is the last segment of Kline's translation of The Odyssey that’s available for the readings. Everything up until this part has been backstory: Odysseus is explaining his tale to the Phaeacians, whose shore he washed up on. From there Odysseus eventually makes his way back home. All in all, he was gone for ten years fighting the Trojan War, and it took him another ten years to get back home.
Odysseus’s journey took a long time for various reasons, but one of them is because of the interference of the gods. The aforementioned cyclops (the one eyed monster) is a son of Poseidon. When Odysseus injured the cyclops, Poseidon cursed him and interfered with his trip home. In the end, none of Odysseus’s men made it home with him.
I ended up taking the perspective of one of the sailors for that reason. It’s miraculous that a lot of them survived the war to head home (initially there were twelve ships that left Troy; as mentioned in the story all but the ship Odysseus was on were destroyed). I liked the idea of one of them making it so far, and thinking they were so close to home, only to miss out. There’s a lot more in the Odyssey that I didn’t mention, because it would take too long, but the same idea is there. I'm not fully satisfied with the story, but I think I did okay in getting into the mindset.

3 comments:

Anhthu Trinh said...

Hi Madison,
Your author's note was very helpful in understanding the story. Even though I love that the perspective is told from one of Odysseus's man, I still felt so sad reading the ending. Your ending was spot on! I love how you really got the thoughts and feelings of the man it seems because I am sure they thought Odysseus was crazy! I can't wait to read more stories!

Unknown said...

Hi Madison,

You did such an excellent job in writing this story. Your author’s note was great for giving me insight into your story. You do a great job of character development and maintaining the reader’s interest. I was hooked the entire time I was reading. Excellent job on this and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

-Andy

Baylor Boyd said...

Hey Madison!
I really liked your story. For anyone who is familiar with the story of Odysseus, they get the irony and perhaps dark humor within the first paragraph. Was it your intention to keep the identity of the main character anonymous? Perhaps you could have given him a name or more details about his family and home to give the reader a stronger attachment to the character and make the irony of the story more powerful. But overall, I thought the idea of writing from the perspective of a doomed man was a fantastic idea and made for a good story.